Out of all your poem this one is my favorite... i love reading stuff that's gory and disturbing like this, you have an awesome talent for writing dark things!
~jess

Wow, i love it...not many people write like this anymore it's to bad they don't..you've got so much talent... keep writting dark poems and never stop..oh and this remined me of the short story "a tell tale heart" ever heard of it..it's pretty good keep up the awsome work
auna

I love ur poem thats wicked!!!

This was the first gory poem that actually made me cringe. I like it. Very intense.

I have to agree with Aunabeth. It reminds me of a modern Tell Tale Heart. Very gory and it made me feel a bit scared. Fantastic work, I know its already been said but I just have to emphisize it; your very talented, keep it up. Oh and your going straight to my favorites! =DD

I really like this poem. I could picture the happenings in my mind. the last few lines are so clever!

This one is my favorite
it created a strong image as i read
the flow was great
this poem is just
Amazing!
5/5
---Jess

I love this poem. It reminds of the dark stuff I used to write in highschool. You have talent, dont loose it!