Comments : You're Doing It Again

  • 17 years ago

    by Bethan

    I did get slightly confused at the end , because the structure changed slightly and you had a longer speech from the positive influence but when I read it again it became a lot clearer, I think its simply because there were 2 speakers and so you need to read it a couple of times to identify when each one is speaking.
    I really liked the idea of this poem though, of the two conflicting ideas,almost llike the typical devil/angel dialogue you see in cartoons. Its used really well here to balance out the fears and insecurities that come from dealing with something like love, and I'm pleased to see one of your poems has a happy ending!!!
    Love you
    Beth xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Well, I wasn't expecting this from you, but i agree with Bethan that I'm glad it has a happy ending. I like the hero with a cape line. That was original. I understand your comments on my poem. It wasn't my best, I know that. But I've been so frustrated lately that those words took it right out of me. But honesty helps you grow. I did write a poem called "Helping Me" literally like right after you critiqued me the first time. I think it's much better. Thanks for your honesty. And yes, you are in my favs...which is why I'm always commenting. lol Jpoet*

  • 17 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Such a lovely poem you potray here, writing well with beautiful emotions penned, so heartfelt yet breathtaking! well done!

  • 17 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Originality.
    this is a fab poem.
    congrats
    ~Emma

  • 17 years ago

    by raven147

    Definitely a good one!Original,beautiful en breathtaking..Keep it up!I love it