Aww I'm so sorry for the loss. I know what it's like to lose someone very close to you. =(

Anywho...The flow was excellent, up until the last stanza. Try re-reading it a couple times, and you might see what I mean.

I thought the idea was great, but there was no emotion in it. I thought it was a story, yes, and I like to read poems like that. But you could add a little emotion to it, and it would probably work out a lot better. =) 5/5 Great ideas. xoxo

Samantha

Ok thanks for the info...i love constructive criticism...:P

Great job. The topic was creative. One thing on all your poems. Put your side notes in ** or () so people won't get confused. Keep it up

Lol kk i will try:P

Awww.... that is so sad! im so sorry for what happened!
much Love
Steph

Aw. =(

Lol jess...and umm i dunno if i forgot to mention to anyone...especially sammycakes...i never actually knew the person...my friend did..so...i need no sympathy..cuz im easy come easy go little high little low...k i'll stop singin hahaha