I like this its good i hope that u can read mine and tell me wut u think of them

thanx,
anna

I liked how you rhymed every 2nd line together. it gave it a good sense of rhythm. so many simple truths were nicely and easily explained.

well done

one thing i did notice:
"money is a deception
that most people cant for sake"

^ the last lane. FORSAKE is one word.

you should write some more poems,
~Ben

Wow...got down to the truth. i loved it...5/5 great job

*Val

I love how simple it was, yet gives a great point across. write some more your really great.!.