Wow this poems is filled with such strong emotions and I love how it's not one big cliche like so many other love poems. keep up the good work,5/5

lots of love
*~*Becky*~*

I really like ur poem, i can relate 2 it but instead it was a girl, well enough about that, still good poem 5/5

This is such a nice peice of work here, made my heart go out for the girl, very nice way to get the reader to feel the emotions too...

Nice job, 5/5. I could tell it was very heartfelt. There's a strong element of truth in it: sometimes it's better to tell someone the the truth that hurts now than to tell them the lie that hurts later.

Nice job. There were just a few things that I need to point out:

"So many days have gone by,
Since I have met the love of my life.
He walked right into my life..."

The repitition of 'life' here makes this stanza sound awkward. If you change it somewhere then something else might help it to flow better.

"Things got shaky,
And all we would do is fight,
He wanted to say goodbye,
But I would not let him out of my sight."

This doesn't really have that natural flow through it. The last line ruins it. If you cut it down it might sound better. Maybe if you said something like, "But I kept him in my sight."...?

Good work, anyway.

Awww... I absolutely loved this poem! Especially these lines:
Even though we stayed together,
Sometimes you still want to leave.
Those just made me want to cry! I also love how it started out being sad and then you showed your strength in it. It just gave the poem a nice little twist where the girl doesn't seem like she's going to die if he leaves. You did an amazing job on this! 5/5

This poem was sweet, but I couldn't really get into it because of the copy and paste errors. Also in this poem the rhyming is kind of cliche'. It's like I new what your next line would be before I read it and because of those two errors it kind of knocked the flow off track. I still think that it was a good poem, it just needs a few adjustments. 5/5

Letty