I'm giving you my most common down gradding comment. Most of the poem was good, but a few parts were 'chunky'. Meaning, not as smooth as the rest. Overal thoug, it was a good poem with good rhythem and a pritty consistent subject. One other thing that bothered me was the word cos. That's not a word, it's not even part of a word. It would of been better if you put 'cause, that is part of a word.

Even if I ignore that, I had a hard time consintrating on your poem, actually the words weren't staying together on the screen so I should of probably stopped and waited a bit then came back, but I didn't. I'll give you a 4/5 for a good poem with a few flaws.

Keep writting, I didn't say you were horrible because that wouldn't of been true.