Great job kiddo

Great job! It has a lot of meaning in it and very deep! Keep writing you are very talented

Perfect poem, and I think it's in the right category! My only suggestion is to shorten that long line in the middle of the poem...Keep it up; your poems are amazing! 5/5

Should i split each of the three long lines into two? or just the one in the middle... do you have any suggestions about HOW to shorten it.

This poem is incredable!!

Wow, great job with this one! I can't find anything possibly wrong with it! Keep it up! :) 5/5

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Omg...like that was really beautifully written! my only suggestion is to put the first letter of the first word on the 10th line down in capital letters! just it looks odd. but nice poem!

5/5. I did enjoy it. It touched me in a way! Your a great writer!