The style you use here is very natural yet at the same time effective..
I could picture out everythought that the lines has made...
It has a message also to ponder upon.

for sure your poems are getting better and better with each write.

keep it up.

WoW ur poems r very good, awsome poems 2, 5/5

A poem that is so good, with so much to understand and think about greatly. it was different, so unique and it was well written.
xxxx

Wow! That was a great idea for a poem. I liked your Mr. Jack twist on it. good job! Jpoet*

+.+ It creates a story in your head. 5/5 +.+

Wow it actually relates to a lot of people who go through that, great poem.

What a beautiful poem hun! I loved the flow and ryhming was great!! the poem was written on a different topic, but it made it soo life~like! great job!!
Ciao xx

Oh sweety.