Comments : Flying

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Good start. Overall you got good vocab and flow.

    "If I can see, This is how its suposed be
    Are me and you meant, to be together
    When I'm without you, I can fly forever "
    Here's some ideas:
    It's spelled "Supposed"
    "Are you and me meant to be together
    The last line is confusing, it makes it sound as if you would rather be single

    Keep it up