Great poem, you don't have to be thin to be beautiful, it's what's on the inside that counts, and who ever told you other wise is a loser. keep up the good writing. shanik

The subject was a common one, the poem wasn't that unique. I think you should use more emotions, how it feels to be you.
Its pretty bland at the moment, but a good try.

Thanx for the comment and your welcome, would you plz read my new poem Love Never Wanted Me. i just wrote it a few seconds ago. thank you shanik

Very sad, but very powerful, too. I'm not really sure the the four stanzas represent a 'cycle' though, like the last line says. Maybe I'm reading it wrong, though. You really got your point across though-- 5/5.

Very good poem, and I can truely relate, and it also true in today society...GP

Hmm... the idea was there... and your poem is very realistic... i liked the way on how some stanzas had a pyramid shape... it was unique... just a suggestion on this stanza...

Pictures of models
And there size 0 body's.
Haunts my mind,
I can't think of anything else.

i think it should be...

Pictures of models
And THEIR size 0 bodies'
HAUNT my mind
AND i cant think of anything else

but dont take it wrong... its just a suggestion... keep working on it... the idea and meaning is already there :D

~angel~

There is a lot of truth that goes on in this poem. A lot of people go through this in life so people can really relate. Great job! 5/5 Keep up the great work!

Innoc3ntStar

Cool personnally i havnt suffered from this but i get an idea of what it is about i guess you could have put more detail into it an captured your audience a bit more but otherwise cool xxx alex xxx

Awww.. I hope that you are not really doing this! I know I used to have a problem eating, and I'm over it now, but I still can't eat that much or I'll get sick. It really screws you up, even after you're over it. But you did an amazing job on this poem, I'm sure that many people can relate to it! 5/5 Keep it up!

It's good, i like it. I kno how u feel with this one, without being thin it feels like nobody really cares. I'm the same way too, sometimes i seriously hate food...lol.

You say you know it isn't great, I think that although maybe you could improve your skill in the actual writing of the poem, the concept and the message were very clear and touching. I see it as more of a release of emotion, which is just as valid as poetry as an attempt at a highly refined traditional style poem.

Well done on conveying the strength of emotion in this piece.

*VioletRaven*

It makes sense but given that i abhore bulimia i dont really like it. but only because of that fact. and its trure for a lot of people im sure.

Well as a model I want to say that it's sad how we are bombarding by images of skinny girls. I too wear 0-2 depending on what I'm wearing but you shouldn't allow this to affect you! Keep your head up and smile and feel beautiful. When you love the way you look and you feel confident others will want in on it. The hottest thing is a girl who is confident in who she is and how she feels about herself. The Industry is changing and big is beautiful, healthy girls who aren't stick thin are gorgeous. So don't fret because you may not be as thin as these models, you are lovely just the way you are. Love isn't love if it's physical or shallow. It's deeper than anything you could gaze upon. Learn that and you've almost gotten the key to success in love.

Naima

I thought this was really sad, it really got to me.
It's a shame so much attention is focused on what a girl looks like nowadays.
The flow off the poem threw me off at times, but the emotion was there behind it and that's what kept me reading.

The first line in ur poem is the same in one of mine.. thats so strange.. anyhow, I liked this poem! :) and I can relate.

Thats so amazing, again it shows your talent very well. x x x

This wasn't your best poem. i don't know, it just wasn't as deep. I don't know how to explain it; but it's as if it's hiding emotions. anyway it was still a great read, love.