Good poemm!!!

Good poemm!!!

Just some minor errors regarding grammar, like for example: i = I // cant = can't // Ive = I've // we was = we were etc.

And it would be nice if you gave the reader a chance to breathe by using a period now and then. Or at least a little more punctuation.

Otherwise a good write. Keep it up. :-)

-Kenneth G. @ Faceless Mirror.