This was great very unusual to find a happy poem on this site i loved it it was different xxx alexxxx

Ooo. It was random, but well done. =)

The flow was good for the most part, the rhymes were orginal. No fixes needed here.

I know that I'm not exactly 100% skinny as I would like to be, but that doesn't stop me from doing things I love. You shouldn't let things get to your head. Just let yourself go. Everyone has a monster in their head. But then again...Everyone has to live with it. If you let it get to you, you'll get nowhere. =) Hope I've been of some help. 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

The poetic level is a lot higher than the form would offer. Its a good right.

5/5

[PygmyPuff]

Wow, this poem was very well written. The Flow was amazing, and the rhymes where great. I do have 2 things to say however, the structure is not ver good, put the lines into stanzas perhaps, and it will make it better structured.

Also, this line,

"My family care for me and my friends"

"Care" Should be changed to Cares

Other than that wonderful Job. I loved it.

Ciao, Joe

What i think make this poem so awsome is that its entirely true... for everyone who's still sane.