Ok, I feel this was not as good as some of your other poems. The Flow was not that great at all. There was no rhyme, although you don't need to rhyme for poems, when you don't you need the flow and structure behind your poem to really make it stand out, which this poem lacked both of.

Keep your head up and keep on trying, practice practice practice...read the comments and learn make changes, and in the end you will develop very good, you have a lot of potential.

Ciao, Joe