Again you have penned a beautiful piece. You are a very talented writer. I think that this poem was perfect. There is really nothing else that I can say. 5/5

Letty

Wow! I really like this poem. It had short 2 word lines which i really liked becuase they were so meaningful. A great read! Keep it up! xx

This was very creative. I like how you started the first two lines in each stanza with the same word. Short but sweet. I loved it.

Havoc
^ cool word. =]

I love this poem. its one you oculd read over and over and over and not get sick of it.
i loved the short stanzas and your vocabulary, and metaphors. great job.

x3 Lauren

Awwww. That was a very nice poem!
Keep up the writing you're good at it!
5/5 God Bless

~*tay*~

Short lines, but gets to the point fast, I like it. maybe you could've been a little more descriptive, but overall great job.

Peace, Joe