I saw you asking for comments so here's a suggestion...one, try not using slang in your poems like Eva or n instead of and, UNLESS you are posting your poems in the slang section...and maybe even try a rhyming poem. I like that you do separate your thoughts into stanzas, but try a rhyming one. I think you'd do great with it!
Charisma*

Good job.. i liked it
-sda-

This is a very good poem...I can understand what this poem..I feel the same way right now so....I love it...But keep up the good work.