Oh it was lovely the best things come from our imaginations

Loving the beauty that lay ahead >should be lies ahead

Seeing you in your tuxedo
This is very basic, I'm sure you can get more descriptive> Using you and your in the same sentence is something you really want to avoid when ever possible.

while walking slowly down the isle
giving you a signal of assurance
ignoring the whispers of the crowd.

Who is giving the signal of assurance?
You can also dorp the from the last line.

OK, You're telling us what is happening, not showing us. Get descriptive, show us how the church looks, is there light filtering in through stained glass windows casting vast arrays of colour onto the guests, aisle and altar?

I like the idea of the poem, but I think you get a lot more creative with this. Let's see what you can do with this solid first draft.

Bret

Be-a-u-t-ful! All I can say! Great flow, choice of words, great everything! :) Loved this one! Very sweet and loving!
:) Keep it up! 5/5

Innoc3ntStar

Wow, you painted a great picture in my mind as well, great job like always, 5/5

Loving the beauty that lay ahead
^ Should be "Lays" not "Lay"

Hmm, this was good, but it could be improved. The idea was good but you did not express it as well as you could. Use better vocabulary or descriptions, make it flow better, and add more imagery in. If you did this, it could definetely be better. For example "Seeing you in your tuxedo" could be "Gazing happily at you in your black tuxedo" or something like that. Nice job though 5/5

Aww it's so cute. ^_^

This is very good for only imagning it. =) The flow was good, the rhymes were ok, and the imagery was fantastic! xD Very imaginative. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Simply beautiful penned, writing well within good imaginations, yet flowed well with beautiful emotions, lovely yet so heartfelt emotions, breathtaking!

This is lovely . i love the gui im with atm and i can picture marring him .. but i dont want to scare him and tell him this . but i love ur poem cause i can realte to it x please read some of mine and tell me what u think thank you x

Hi Honey

it is a very nice poem and i'm sure it will goning to be a reality.

love you
Suda

That paints QUITE a BEAUTIFUL picture!! :):):)

I enjoyed reading this, great flow and rhythm. keep it up, i think u r very talented.

I liked it...But, I'll be honest, I didn't love it. It was a very delightful write and fine to read, but it didn't flow for me. Forgive me, I'm just honest.
It is a very nice topic, though. Good job.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 4.5

5/5. This is a great poem. You discribed the wedding very carefully and it made me feel like I was there! Good Job!