Wow jessy , this poem is so emotional. i loved all the words u used and it just captured my every attention.

well done

sophie:)

Wow i absolutely loved this poem!! so full of emotion and written beautifuly!!
excellent work
5/5
Luv FallenxFromxGrace

Great job lovely poem beautiful keep it up 5/5 good job again

Wow. This is really deep. You are incredibly talented.

The flow, the rhyming . This was near flawless to me . I loved it sooo much . This was deep, and it certainly captured my attention .
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Wow! Very emotianal peace of writing! The flow was excellent. You write really good! Keep them up, i really enjoy reading them. xx

This is a very sad poem. And whats even worser is that we have so much of this type of thing going on in the world today. I loved this poem it was full of sadness, pain, and sorrow. You painted a full picture of a little three year old girl all alone without a mother left to the abuse that comes from her father. I almost cried reading this poem, because I see so much of it on the news and in the papers, etc. But it seems like no one really cares. I love the emotion that you put in this poem. The story you've told may or may not be true, but there is someone out there going through exactly what you have just painted in this picture. Wonderful job! Keep up the great work. 5/5

Letty

Moly! That was amazing. It was beautifully penned to create a vivid picture in anyone's mind. You have a talent my dear, and I love it.

5/5

-Jenna.

I found this one a little confusing. But when I read over it again, I loved it.

Wow...this was breathtaking.
You are an exceptional writer, especially for someone of your age.
I loved this, truly loved it.
I have nothing bad to say at all.
Another 5/5

Wow, this was extreamly sad. I loved it. Great write. The flow was wonderful. I have one word of advice, however;

"Her mother had long ago left them"

I think you should try re-aranging that line, maybe try this..

Her mother had left them long ago

Other than that, everything is good, once again a wonderful write.

Ciao, Joe

This poem makes my heart bleed with tears. That is all that i will say besides 5/5.
Keep writing.

GR8 job. i like the ending:)

That's was really sad. good work!

Dear Jessy,

Your Visions always move me, though I am not a emotional person. That is a wonderfully done job. The concept and length was just right for my taste.

"The flower of fear in her body does bloom" Ecsstassy it is! NICE. VERY Nice.

I do have a few suggestions, some of which are also noted by others.

"Her mother had long ago left them" breaks the flow, probably the line should read "Her mother had long ago left her".

In the line "Selfishly saving only her own skin" should probably read "Selfishly saving her own skin". Only affects the pronounciation or rather the syllable flow of the line.

"To him, she left her tortured child" should probably read "To him, she left ehr child to be tortured"

The line "Confused and hurt, betrayed and pained" should prbably read Confused and hurt, betrayed and suffering" as "pained" again affects the language flow.

The 3 stanzas in the middle did not produce the effect as of the first and last stanzas, but the first and last stanzas are ... hm.... something that you shou8ld be proud of.

And Jessy, sorry to have kept you waiting this long.

Omg. omg. this poem was so sad.. the emotion and pain flowed thru this poem intensly...