Aww it's so sad. =(

The flow was very well done in this one. I didn't have to read it over at all to understand it. But it's quite long. And I got bored half way through. I suggest that if you do a longer poem, try to add lots of emotion here and there, instead of just telling us a story. I thought the rhymes were getting a lot better in this one; they didn't seem cliche to me. Keep it up. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha