Wow. just wow. the last line actually made my heart stop and do a double take.

excellent, powerful poetry right there. 5/5

thankyou for the wonderful comments u left for me. =D
keep writing, u have talent.
xxx

A little bit different but you did an amazing job!!!
Thanks for the comment as well.

I really liked this, the theme was original in its concept, which is always nice.

I liked the imagery, wording and flow, and I thought the rhyme scheme was good.

5/5