I like it. good metaphor

Wonderful poem! I think you miss spelled "shreds" in the second line of the third stanza--- And in the last stanza: "They were very close one lost day" that line seems too long; the flow is off... Other than that, good job!

xxEvilAngelxx

I liked it, it had a lot of emotion behind it and I'm sure that alot of people on the site can relate to it. You described everything great and I really liked this one, I don't know why; but I did.

5/5

-Jenna.

Awhh. That was so sad hun.. I found the flow good except for the last line where I think the rhyme scheme goes down the drain a little. It was definetely heartfelt and the descriptions were great. Nicely done sweetie! 5/5