Ok a couple pf forced and cliche rhymes, have you tried to not use an abcb rhyme scheme,i mena it \s a nice pooem., but these poems get very annoying simply b/c of the r/s. i liked it, it was well written but i recommend you try to break out of this shell. you have great potential. and i can see you writng alot better poems if you dont stick to this format and use cliche'd rhymes. =]

x.x:Lauren

Also- some of the lines seem shortm or cut off, and long, i think you shoudl reread the poem yourself, maybe tomorrow, and revise it. =]

Ooo. Anger. Especially in the last stanza. I liked it. I mean, for this kind of style. I don't usually quite comprehend or 'get' poems such as friendship poems. I mean, I can relate to them. I just don't see why people go on about things though. But this one didn't seem like that to me. It was easy enough for me to follow, yet the emotion was deep. You really seemed as if you loved your friend at times, and then hated her the next. I love the 'everywhere' idea. =P

The flow was excellent. Up until the last stanza lol. The rhymes 'inside' and 'side' are very similar. I don't think I would've used them either. Try taking out some words, or putting in a few more stanzas to make the ending flow better. It kind of just came to a stop, ya know? I mean, I like it, but maybe for next time, try smoothing it out a little. Hope you didn't take this personally. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha