Excellent work. It kept me reading and painted a picture in my mind. Wonderful vocabulary and it has a beautiful, deep meaning overall. I liked it very much. Keep up the great work. :]

Chelsey

Lovely write flowed with good message....so heartfelt, yet beautiful emotions penned...one of the best ever i've read from you, keep them coming, have a great day, take care, bert ~

A few suggestions:

- In the 4th stanza - "feets" should be "feet".

- 5th stanza - "loose" should be "lose".

- last stanza - "fingures" should be "fingers".

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"Hope is a first step on one way road to love
Time you loose but a heart you may gain
Love could leave as time passes us by
But if you hold on to yourself, Hope remains"
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I loved that stanza. Very inspirational love poem. I can't say I can relate to this. But it was amazing. I loved the wording you used. I honestly don't really know what to say. This was just beautiful...as always. Take care,

Love,

-Poetess

I love your idea, and ur 4th stanza especially well done keep up the good work xox sam 5/5

Omg u have a talent with writing poems. great use of words. very touching piece. it was really good keep it up xx

Nitin, I think this is a phenomenal piece of work! what you say is so true. I think hope forms the axis on which this magic called love revolves around. As long as that solid axis remains, we can be sure, love will come to us again.

I do hope your dreams come true.

peace
shobhana

Love could leave as time passes us by
But if you hold on to yourself, Hope remains

that line was simply beautiful..
sorry haven't had time to check ur poems out.. but i'm back again.. lol

as usually.. this was brilliant... ur a great writer..

keep writing..

Much love,
ipsita

Really wonderful! asi mentioned in the mail too. u r awesome Nitin!
keep writing.5/5

luv

This poem is awesome, and so true. Sam

Nice

"Sands of time slipping from my fingers"

I loved that line. The whole poem was just beautiful
Well done!
5/5
*Gem*

This poem is so beautiful! Your descrptions of things are excellent! You are truely talented.