GREAT!! thispoem almost made me cry. its really sad. my dad went to war in iraq for 8 months and he is back now and safe at home. but it makes me sad to hear this becaue that would be me and my family if he had died.i am very lucky that he is alive.

Wow, that was beautiful.
I have always been to Remembrance day and I certainly think you did it justice with this poem.

I enjoyed the theme you used and the story. It genuinely touched my heart, and it is good to know that people still remember.

Well done, A great write on a touching subject.
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Wow, very powerful, good poem to read. I like the way you wrote it, my ex boyfriend went out to war and he came back ok but the worry was a great stress to my life. I was touched by this poem.

AWWH. That was sooo sad hun. Omg, the flow was amazing. The descriptions well done and the emotion really strong. Great job sweetie. 5/5

Oh wow...this one did actually make me cry.
It was very well expressed and heart wrenching, and I loved the imagery, flow, rhyme scheme and wording.
Never give up your talent, hun.

Amazing job. very sad but it's very true. i do believe with the soliders. There's a mistake in your poem i do believe when i was reading this.

"but when he turned to her mother, he saw a sad and silent tear"

it should be

"but when he turned to HIS mother, he saw a sad and silent tear" not her mother.

but another then that you did an amazing job.

keep it up. keep on writing. love always && forever. Also thank you for the commenting my poems means alot to me.

Very nice poem. And a sad one. My boyfriends dad died in the war in Iraq so this poem means alot to me and I am sure would mean alot to him. Keep up the good work.

That is amazing!!! It gives you a view point of what I think to be a small child, I really like that. And it is visual. That is always a plus. I also like how you rhyme. Great Job! Keep it up ;)

I loved this poem, and i understand that a loss that big can effect the world and for you to remember and show how you fell about it with a poem means a lot to many people.

Sad but this is a very good poem, great feeling and emotion, i give it a 5/5!!! you've truely have talent so keep it up!!!

This poem was so sad, it brought tears to my eyes.
It was superbly written, and writing from a childs point of view always makes it that much more powerful to the reader.

The flow and rhythmn were excellent.. everything about this poem was truly amazing.. well done 5/5 xx

I loved this poem! the only thing was that you switched between verb tenses, i.e. it went from present to past then back again, but otherwise, a phenomenally (sp?) written piece~

Great one, you have done a brilliant job on it, keep it up.........5/5

This poem tells a really good story. Very honourable of you to write a poem of Rememberance. The battlefields of graves are there to teach us a lesson, but we will never learn.

The poem started off a little shakey when you write 'side' and 'outside', but the rest of it was great. Keep up the good work.

You did it again great flow it all went together and i could picture it all in my head nice job 5/5

I had goose bumps the whole time reading your poem. It was so beautiful. Really good job.

Good good. i love ur poems!

x3Tiffie

Wow, that is amazing! its so so sad! you almost made me cry!
Wonderfuly written and verry well rhymed.
The flow was perfect the whole way though.
Wow! definatly a 5/5 from me
keep it up

~Murder.

I like, long but i iiked! it was good! lol

Excellent penmanship...sad,amazing write...very sad yet there were a few grammar erors though but the emotions portrayed were strong
Good job!
5/5
xxPoojaxx