Comments : One day ill let this go

  • 17 years ago

    by unknown & unwanted

    Look at your votes they tell you how good your poem is. as for i liked it im not much of a love poems fan but it wasn't to bad. i like it better if you were able to make the point come out a lil stronger, make me feel what i'm sopose to

  • 17 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    Oh my goodness. i like this a lot! and im sorry :D i love you....

  • 17 years ago

    by KATHY ♥

    That's a really good one:)

  • 17 years ago

    by Erica Jovie©

    Just got out of a relationship just like this...it is so tough so i know where ur coming from...ur a great writer and express yourself really well! i like the part:
    "I’ll just live in denial
    For as long as I can
    Act like everything’s okay
    And just play pretend"
    relationships are though so i hope ur feelin' better soon..hey u might relate to my poem "goodbye" and "missing you"...if ya have time i'd love ur feedback. keep ur head up and God bless you!

  • 17 years ago

    by Doesnt matter

    Another great one.. 5/5!

  • 17 years ago

    by ShadowDancer

    Anouther great poem, i really like the style you have. a few gramatical errors, (oneday? one day)

    i could really relate to this one. very good

    shadow dancer

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Another good write. This one stanza was my problem though,
    And the more I think about it
    The more I become sure,
    the more im overwhelmed
    And everything becomes a blur

    I think the last line was the problem. It was too long and threw off the flow. So maybe try revising it a little like this

    And the more I think about it
    The more I become sure.
    Yet when I'm overwhelmed
    Is when everything blurs.

    That's just a suggestion...

    But of course, you knew the good stuff was coming. I enjoyed your line about the raincoat protecting you. I like your use of understandable illustrations. You don't try to confuse the readers with big words. It's like your diary on paper. When we write to ourselves, we don't get lost in words you need dictionaries for or sayings you need a professor to explain. So I enjoy your simplicity and the way you pour yourself into your writings. Good job!
    I enjoyed a lot!
    Charisma*
    2nd and final comment

  • 17 years ago

    by Landi Cordier

    I can’t stand you but I need you
    If I want to be fine

    you realy know how to write! you take simplicity, and turn it into magic, hold it tight!

    Narc xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Alyssia L K

    I really liked this poem!! At times I feel the same way...So far i like all ur poems...Keep Writing!!!!