Comments : I Care

  • 13 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    I am against the idea of the poem, you have written it nicely but you know what I am talking about, you have written a nice poem but from my view point you missed it up with this line
    "when you done
    making out with someone else"
    it might not be bad, but its just creating an image that me, personaly dont wish to see, and you know exactly what I mean.
    other than that a 5/5 poem, and I hope you feel better...

  • 13 years ago

    by emmerz

    Hi it was an alrite poem...but im not so sure either that i would call it that... its kind of like a bunch of thoughts (with the same subject) put on paper. maybe if you organized it a bit better? but keep trying, practice makes perfect!

    Emmmm!

  • 13 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    The poem was alright . It wasn`t like good, but it wasn`t too bad . Some grammar mistakes and all, and this:

    when you done
    making out with someone else

    kinda messed it up . But try and construct it better and maybe edit it some . Other than that, it`s fine , but it paints a picture I don`t wanna see .
    ..ღ__MiNDYY