Comments : I'll live long

  • 17 years ago

    by Kalgalath

    This is like sad. but at the same time it seems like you are trying to get over this person and you are sure that youll be able to.

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Okay. This did rhyme well, and the flow was good. One typo is that in your 3rd stanza the last word should be NOW not KNOW. Another is 3rd stanza last line...it should say that's with an apostrophe. But overall good job!
    Simple!
    Charisma*

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    I love the last stanza, its so impowering (sp?). I know how relationships can go wrong and when they do its good to stay positive. Hopefully pen and paper will mix many more times. *5/5*

    Alyson