Well the poem is not bad at all , but u have quite a few problems with the strycture and putting yur commas the right place . In certain parts of the poem you are stating one thng and then turning around your words e.g. i would not care about all the wrong things i have done , actually i will because i love you- that shud express the first partbetter because then it seems as i f you are just not sure of what u are felling , it sees confusing

Otherwords i know how the situation feels but keep up writting , u will get better just keep expressing yourself.

Well the poem is not bad at all , but u have quite a few problems with the strycture and putting yur commas the right place . In certain parts of the poem you are stating one thng and then turning around your words e.g. i would not care about all the wrong things i have done , actually i will because i love you- that shud express the first partbetter because then it seems as i f you are just not sure of what u are felling , it sees confusing

Otherwords i know how the situation feels but keep up writting , u will get better just keep expressing yourself.