Simply fantastic. The best poem I have read all day, and thank you! For teaching me about a different type of poem.
I've read and reread it and I honestly can't offer any improvements, I really thought it was fine as it is. I liked your refrain "All evil she has shed, except her rusty broken chains" Brilliant description.

My only offer would be you could make it longer!

Very enjoyable piece of writing, Well done indeed!

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Wonderful.
I just loved it every word!!
It's so beautfiul and sad, i love the
repitition of the last sentence in each stanza i think it really pulled the peice together.
GREAT JOB:)

I really like the story in this. The repetitive line was excellent and worked well with the poem. I love how you write so many different styles of poems, it keeps it interesting. You are excellent at writing the hard ones too. Great write. Keep it up. =] 5/5

Tammie xo

"Bleaching away at her mind, washing away the stains"
Now that is a mighty nice line! Wonderfully written, expressive and not forced. Thank you for the lovely comment on mine, and I'm off to read some more of your work. 5 from me, well done!

Very creative and very emotional. Very well done though. I really liked this poem. You can really get the messege or the story you're trying to get through and I thought it was wonderful.
5/5 Great Job. Keep up the work!
God Bless.

~*Tay*~

You are a very talented writer. I love how you use different styles and not the same one, over and over again, like I do. =] Keep it up.

>black&&blue

I really liked the line you repeated, it really wrapped around each stanza nicely. Good choice of words, and really neat ideas.

The repetition of the last line was wonderful. It really brought the poem together. Very powerful, too. Excellent work.

Great Poem, and keep writing!
~*Dreaming of Your Face*~

Im ont a very big -dark poem fan-, but i really did like this one. as i said to another poet, i really like the kyrielle form. it seems to just make sense to me. it may have just been that poem, but now it may just be these TWO poems because this one dew me in as well. good job!

I love the repetition in the last line and the meaning is deep. Great word choice and good flow too! Sorry its taking me so long to do this, i can't tell you how busy ive been.

xxEvilAngelxx