Comments : Break Us Free

  • 17 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    First....your use of language detail is deep....Your intentional imagery is successful.....Your rhythm is interesting.....and....Your message of Light Is received......
    Second....I think this should be in 'Life'....
    Third....; -)...all your pronouns line up but one....try: 'The facade we pretend'.......
    Peace.