True emotion, you write with abundant honesty. I really felt every emotion you wanted to convey, and I felt it strongly. Great poem, and if you would like, my poem Whiter Shade Of Pale is pretty much about the same topic, and I would truly appreciate your opinion.

Im so sorry if some derk brain did that to you...that poem made me cry...one of the few that could...i felt everything that you wrote...im sorry again...but this was a great poem

Emotion and originality: 5 Great job.
Now, I would suggest that you don't skip lines, create stanzas, shorten and lines, and watch for your punctuation. Even the little things help a reader. Keep it up, hope I've helped