I think flows just fine. I can really relate though my story is slightly different. Great job

This is an...unexplanitory wonderful poem! i love it..acctually its kinda my situation...well done!!!

Omg, you have no idea how close this is to my life story! its good to know others are going through the same thing!

Keep 'em comin!

Dont edit it.. its perfect the way it is now.. beautiful

Don't change a thing, my dear. I am going through almost the same thing right now, and you said it best. Keep spilling the words of your heart.

0MFG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
that iz exactly where i am rite now in ma life!
cuz this boy i liked me 1 year wen i didnt like him and now wen i like him, he dont like me??
but k33p up tha gudd w0rk

I lyk it as is. u shouldn't have 2 change a thing. reminds me of wat 1 of my friends is goin through rite now.

The flow of the poem is just fine. Great work, keep it up.

Hey i can totally relate to this poem!!!! its like my life atm lol
great work
Luv FallenxFromxGrace

This is so beautiful. you inspire me to write deeper and more soulful poems. I've been writting for so long it comes natural.

Awwww i like this one it is nice i can relate to it just like everyone else and no you dont need to edit anything

I like your poem...I think it is sad how many of us girls find ourselves in that situation...I just wrote a poem about it too. Anyway, feedback: I like it...but if you want something....i'd look at this part:
'Cause I know that if you lose her,
You'd go insane.

Every time I glance at you,
Whenever you're not with me.
You're showing her off to the world,
For everyone to see.

It doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem, which flowed together beautifully!

This is really good ! keep it up!

Nice poem!!
this was exactly how i felt right now..
it's as if I am reminiscing all the pain I've gone through when I read your poem..
this really made me cry..
great job!

WOW! I absolutely love it!