Comments : Preternatural cries

  • 15 years ago

    by sibyllene

    There's some real creativity in this poem! (shocking, i know.) But seriously:

    "The words remind me of a story

    (A story I once burned,
    The cells in my brain,
    Smelt of ash)."

    That is sweet, poetical joy, right there.

    The "Twas" is a little lumpy, to me, since it's a contraction of "it was." Maybe if you had some punctuation ending the line before, it wouldn't be bad. But that's just being really picky. Great poem, seriously

  • 14 years ago

    by Chris

    I think this is brilliant

  • 14 years ago

    by Kristina

    Wow this poem is amazing. you did a really great job on writing it. keep up the great work. 5/5


  • 14 years ago

    by Naerwen

    I would like to voice my admiration for this piece of writing. It is unlike anything I have read on this site, or amongst my own writings for a very long time. A melancholic tradegy of the human mind, it in itself a dejected and nostalgic performance...

    I am left with an unsettling yet familiar feeling after reading this exceptional write.

    Best Wishes