Comments : Broken Kodak Smiles

  • 16 years ago

    by Leah20

    I really like the way this was written. I loved the line :
    "I dont mean to sound emotional
    But I am."
    The following line,however, has a strange flow to it:
    I have those good times, genuinely smiling
    but those times are limited though, they are what im living for.

    instead of that perhaps change it to:

    But though those times are limited, they're what I'm living for

    keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    It was really good.
    I saw the title and felt compelled to check it out.
    I'm glad i did.
    You hid a strong message inside the words.
    Well done
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 16 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow.. I absolutely love this poem. I can relate to it so much..
    -Peace Sign, and smile one more time.
    These Kodak moments are all you will have left
    I absolutely loved those lines for some reason.. they really stood out to me. You did an amazing job on this poem. I really loved it! 5/5