WOW!!! this poem is amazing.I love it soooo much.

Its cool come and look at my newest one

Kamille,

Very nice poem! The best always come from the heart, and your ability to make the words become alive is fantastic!

You wrote true, when you said I would like it.

-V

I enjoyed the fact that there was a conclusion.

There are a few past tense problems within your poem. For example...

I didnt love you because of your,
Looks, Charm or money.
I loved you because your,
Smart, Sweet and funny

"your" in the third line should be "you were."

You showed me love,
You took my hand.
You gave me more than,
Anyone ever can.

"Can" should be "could." I realize you were following a rhyme scheme, but it changes your tense and is grammatically incorrect.

Excluding the last quatrain, the six stanzas before it did not influence the theme of your poem.

When writing you must always remember there is a theme to every poem. Your theme in this poem was thanking whoever this young man was, and the content within should support that theme. Every line that doesn't explain why you are thanking the young man is irrelevant.

Remember poetry is a small form of story telling, and within every story there is a beginning, middle, and end.

Woww tht was really good and it was definitely worth the read!! well dun 5/5 :D

VERY CUTE

I love this poem!!! lol wow you are really good at writing... this one really caught me... prolly cause this exact same thing happened except the guy hates me now... eh but i hope this one is true!!! have fun!!!!