Comments : Effect

  • 17 years ago

    by Tasha

    Wow this poem is realy good. 5/5 I am going to add you as one of my favorites if you dont mind. I just think that all the poems of yours that I have read so far are really well written.

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Great poem. 5/5. The only problem I have with it is that it is to short. Keep up the great work.

  • 17 years ago

    by ellewen

    I believe the word you used was honest...
    Not horrible I can tell you were full of emotion which is always good, and it seems like a poem of grief like many of mine so I truly undertsnad where you are coming from. But- your poems need more rhythm, more poetic form. I have read allot of your poems, and they just seem to stop. They don't really end. And you could use some vocabulary, or something descriptive. Make them feel what you are feeling more then just a statement. Please do not be offended, I say these words only to do one thing and that is help you. I really hope you are someone who can take critisism bc sometimes people think I am coming off harder then I mean to. I promised I would comment four, so I will go on. And hey if you ever want to talk to me I have AIM or you could private message
    ~skittles

  • 17 years ago

    by ellewen

    I believe the word you used was honest...
    Not horrible I can tell you were full of emotion which is always good, and it seems like a poem of grief like many of mine so I truly undertsnad where you are coming from. But- your poems need more rhythm, more poetic form. I have read allot of your poems, and they just seem to stop. They don't really end. And you could use some vocabulary, or something descriptive. Make them feel what you are feeling more then just a statement. Please do not be offended, I say these words only to do one thing and that is help you. I really hope you are someone who can take critisism bc sometimes people think I am coming off harder then I mean to. I promised I would comment four, so I will go on. And hey if you ever want to talk to me I have AIM or you could private message
    ~skittles

  • 17 years ago

    by Extinct Angel

    It is a very very good poem u got #1 in our poetry contest with it n i'm proud u used form in it 5/5 very good