AY U!!!! this is on ur myspace aint it....... i love it!!!

Great poem pretty sad hope your ok =(

I am hope you is too

I like the idea of the poem, very interesting topic. You would create more powerful atmosphere with adding some more punctuation. Also, it would be easier to read if it's in stanzas. You sounded really frustrated in the end of this piece, it wasn't good like the beginning which leaves bad impression. You expressed emotions in a good way.

I like the poem
it doesn't seem forced, but there are some grammatical problems i saw like:
"i didn't care anymore nothing really matters"
"didn't" is past tense, "nothing really matters" is present tense
this doesn't take away from the 5/5 from me though
good work and keep writing
tim