I really like the poem and the story you are trying to tell with it but somehow I can’t get in.
The rhyme is good, the ending as well and I do like it. So 4/5

I love this! Your poems are always soo well thought out! I love it!
xoxo

This is excellent. I love it. So emotional. 5/5
-Vino

Wow this was different to ur other two poems ive read.. this was poerful but and i liked the words u used. keep it up. xx

Very nice. one of the best ive seen so far. keep up the writing! and thanks for the comment.

♥Beth