I loved the first stanza the best.
It flowed well and the emotion was deep.
5/5

[Sarah]

Fairly short but effective i like the second stanza it really had emotion keep up the good work and ill keep reading

xxx alex xxx (3)

I found this poem a bit dull...i wish it would have went into more imagery

Well written, really dark. I acn relate. You did a good job as always. Great show of emtion, nice flow, well worded. 4/5

That was so sad. I could actulaly feel the emtions in this one 5/5

Wow, just as usual a very good read

This was a very good poem. It was short but it reaching deeply into the feelings of depression and the happiness of escaping pain. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson

I thought it was also a very good poem. It was very short, but thats all it had to be to get your point across. Great work, 5/5

This poem.. I can see your point.. but it ws kinda off the point.. it was empty.. I didn't feel any emtions whatsoever in this one.. so maybe you should add a word to help change .. make it more interesting.. nice try though.. keep up the work 3/5

Pretty short but good 5/5

It speaks to the heart.

Wow. this is such a simple poem, yet so heartfelt and sad! its absolutely beautiful!
~Claire

You are tired,
Always so tired.
[[I liked those lines for some reason. May I use them?]]

This wasn't bad. I just really liked those lines. But. None of the rest stuck out to me. The first stanza killed me, though, because of the cliche rhyming. =/.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

The beginning was strong, but the ending was very weak. 4/5

I like this poem. The flow isn't that great but it gets the point across. Keep writing. And thanks for commenting on my poems. It means a lot.

The tile is good, it caught my attention. The Opening was somewhat blah and that seemed to carry through the rest of the work as well. The rhyming words were pretty common as well; maybe even overused. I just did not see a lot of effort in this one. Most of the words you chose are one syllable words that seem to run together.

A decent poem overall, but not my favorite. It may work better as a haiku poem where the flow is expected to be short.

You are crying,
Because you are dying.
You are running,
Because you are hiding.
^^ very contradictory great way to draw the reader in and wonder what its about

You are tired,
Always so tired.
You feel drained,
Every day.
^^ ah everyone can feel that way at one point : /

This is the end.
You want to be dead,
So there will be no more pain,
And you will no longer be tired.
So goodbye pain.
^^ wow very ironic true the pain will be gone but than again you will be dead!

like i said i think your sadder poems are stronger
5/5

I like this poem really much... The flow is really good and, though the form is simple, the theme is deep...
I only think you repeat a bit too much on the second stanza... you could emphasize the "tired" by emproving the wording a little bit...
The first stanza leaves me confused...
"You are running,
Because you are hiding."
You run because you hide? maybe "because you need to be hiding"... well, I don't know for sure... It might just be my lack of understanding...
The third stanza is the best, I think... It feels very deep... :)
although i tend to make some critiques, i find this poem very good... ;)

*isabel*

I liked it..
I think it was just rushed..but then again that sorta adds to the piece.
It sorta makes it like they're thinking frantically...
Wow haha now that I think of it that way, I really really liked this. XP
Excellent job, 5/5
-Paula

This is sad yet meaningful. sometimes when we look back on the struggled we face in life , we just wish we were in a different world, but when we think back, all we're searching is the easier sides. Life is like love, it exist, we feel it, but we never know what the future might brings.
it was good over all but more could be said on such a topic. well done, it merits 4.5/5.