If you want my personal opinion, throughout the poem I was expecting a revealing meaning at the end; I thought you were going to finish with a bang. It seemed a little bit cut off to me.

However, I did enjoy reading it. You made some very interesting points there, and it was rather intriguing.

Ya I agree with jaime a bit, I thought your finish was gunna be huge, but it was still a great poem. You really made me think, what if those thing did/didn't happen. excellent job 5/5.

If you want some help with writting funny stuff, just send me a private message. great job

I think i should attempt one lol but id make a mess of it its harder i htink than normal poetry lol ;D

xxx alex xxx

Hehehehe yah actually im still thinking how can i put an ending of this poet.. but thanks for the compliments i really appreciate..

What if the rainbow appeared at night,
And the stars wouldn't spark?
[[I loved this line.]]

Take off the last two stanzas, and put it in "Nature" and it will work a lot better. Promise. =]

Not too bad at all, save for those two last lines. Keep it up; description and imagination in you are very good.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

IF all those things were to happen... I dont know what people would do. think it was the end of the world?? lol
i have a few thoughts to make this poem better
"What if a season's may adversely rearrange,"
change to
"What if the seasons adversely rearranged,"

and
"What if the birds can't fly,
And the fish wouldn't swim?"
change to
"What if the birds couldn't fly,
And the fish couldn't swim?"

also
"What if all of this will happen,
what will you do?"
change to
"What if all of this happened?
what would you do?"

and
"How to end this poet"
i think you meant to say
"How to end this poem"

i know its a lot. but its just what i thought needed fixing.

5/5

I thought this was cute, but not as funny as I thought it'd be. I thought you're idea was quite good, however. The ending seemed a little cut off. Other than that, it was pretty good. :P