Its good but incomplete i feel you could right more on this = ) expand it just a little bit

That was surprisingly a really good short poem. I have to give kudo's for your idea on writing this... i never would have thought of a poem such as this.
Good rhyming scheme.
Great write.
Keep writing.
~Stevie

This is my first poem its a short poem, and i diddent no what i was doing when i made this, hell i still dont no what to do:P lol, thanks for the coements ppl and if you have anythig to say that can help me plzz do!

Its an awsome start to your poems (in others words im waitting to hear more) and im glad i inspired you to start writing. Keep it up. Also don't be afriad to add more like one of the other comments said it needs more detail. Keep it up sparkles... i mean wolfey..... ^.^ lol.... i love it and i will be waiting on more to come!!!

Heyy sup wolfey blondebeky here keep up the good work like come on u signed up be4 me and i have more then one poem on here now i think i have like 4 or 5 not sure but ya keep it up woot woo