Comments : Found Me In You

  • 13 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    That was very good! It's not like you to not write poems that are 4 lines each but this definately worked and I LOVED the last line. Great job!
    ~Midnight Sun

  • 13 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    Very touching. Very nicely written.

  • 13 years ago

    by Gem

    Different from your normal poems but still incredibly good! You used some excellent words in this one! Very moving indeed.

    "In this rush of life, I was lost in the crowd
    But your hand guided me out."

    It's just that couplet that threw me off a bit because it seems kind of stilted. But i can't think of anything that would sound better so i'll leave it for now ;)
    Superb love poem =)
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 13 years ago

    by x.Athame.x

    Absolutely stunning, an amazing work. Hope to read more of your work soon, you have such talent. Best wishes, and Blessed Be. *5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Cindy

    What a wonderful poem! I am really glad I got to read this! Excellent job!

  • 13 years ago

    by Hott Mama

    Awww.. its so sweet and romantic, you did a good job writing this and making it rythme so beautiful! Keep it up and good luck on your writing. Also thanx for your comment on my poem .:*.

  • 13 years ago

    by Kenneth

    Very good.. i loved it 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Very good write. I agree with Gem on the one couplet:

    "In this rush of life, I was lost in the crowd
    But your hand guided me out."

    Maybe use something like:

    With a touch from your hand, you guided me out.....

    Just a suggestion...it's still a marvelous love poem, full of imagery and emotion....5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by samie

    This poem i can relate i love it keep the poems coming!!!!

    ***Samantha

  • 13 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    This is great. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Tristan

    This is a very cute poem..very meaningful
    keep up the amazing work...
    tristan

  • 13 years ago

    by TaNyabAbEE

    It's really good. i can really relate to it, and i'm sure everyone has fallen in love once, and known these feelings. it's really amazing, there's nothing i would change about it. keep it up!!:)

  • 13 years ago

    by Jamica

    Excellent write. I enjoy reading your stuff. Keep it up!

  • 13 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    COMMENT # 3

    aww.. this is soo cute.. simple but still strong.. the emotion is great and the last line is killer.. another spectacular one

  • 12 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Wow, so dang powerful. Didn`t expect that ending, at all. Every line in this piece just screams the emotion, I love it.

    5.5
    :]

  • 12 years ago

    by Boy

    Lovely writing style. strong emotions and image you hae put here. excellent piece of work

  • 12 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    A nice, simple, soothing piece. I particularly liked the lines 'It's not what you said, but all that you do' and 'Fall into my lap, spill from my mind', the latter especially, it was wonderfully worded.

    Brad