Great poem u don't need to improve a thing
keep up the good work

That was a good poem but it sounds like you have just found random words to ryme and not put much tought into it but it realy was an awesome poem keep it up:)

You write with your heart which makes for good poetry. May you find peace and joy that you seek in your heart.

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Hey.. my dear "daughter sherry!! this si great.. im glad you posted your poems already..

Hey.. my dear "daughter sherry!! this si great.. im glad you posted your poems already..

Wow. this is such a powerfullness poem!
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powerfullness...idk what it means, but its so powerfullness...I LOVED IT!!! 5/5 from me my friend =D

Oh wow...this is so powerful..i love it! it is so good...good job!!! 5/5