Comments : Losing you

  • 17 years ago

    by ShadowedPhoenix

    Short but to the point- i like the repetion of i'm losing you, adds to the helplessness!!!!!!!! Good poem!

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I liked this.
    Short and straight to the point, and filled with emotion.
    I thought at times the flow was a little off, but apart from that, you did a fine job.

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    * try seperating your poem like this

    No matter what I do
    It always seems I'm losing you
    I'm losing my way,
    It seems I forgot how to play
    The game you play.

    I miss you
    I need you
    I need to be close to you
    But you might love her
    And this is true
    Cause it still feels like I'm losing you

    also when you say you "might" love her its contradicts when you say this is the truth.. the truth would me you know he loves her but you said he "might"

    besides that great job..i really like htis poem!

  • 17 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    * 5/5. Good poem. Short, but felt alot of emotions! Keep up the good work!

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Still need some work with flow and rhyme schemes but the message is filled with emotion. Nice job!