I really like it good job....

Good work keep it up

Now let me be honest.

There are hundreds, if not thousands of poems like this on P & Q alone. Do you know what they all have in common? Lack of structure. Your poem lacks the structure it needs to affect your audience in a specific way.

You will receive many comments stating how they can relate. That is because the poem is too vague, which makes it easier to relate because there is no specificity to it.

Listen to me very carefully.

This poem is yours. So make it yours.