"You're the one to blame of fears.
The one that broken my wings."

Very powerful... and such a sad tone to it... but you did a great job in getting the message across and telling the story. A lot of emotion went into this...
Well done
5/5
*Gem*

Wow, wonderful write. I loved it. The flow was good as well as the structure. The rhymes were excellent. Keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Jeej, nice job! I like the story behind your poem. You did great with the rhyme, descriptions and stanza’s, but try to focus on a steady rhythm. I know it’s hard but a good rhythm could make your poem even stronger! 4/5

A very touching write and I get a gray feeling of a mystery here. Nicely done
5/5

So sad. Can't say I love upset family poems, but you did a very good job in your writing. You always do. Your a poet I love to come across because you have great style and rhyme! Love it!
Charisma*

"Father from the flesh of my blood.
The one that left me to weep.
You're the one that haunts my past.
You're the reason I can't sleep."

I love that part and the very last. Wow, This one is really good too. I have to read more of your poetry!!! Good job and keep on writing!! 5/5

~Shae

I liked this, I thought it was a very moving piece, really sad but a pleasure to read.
My favourite part was the last stanza I thought that was really powerful.