It was very well written. The flow was ok as well as the strucutre.

This line, "What was it that I do?" I Believe should be, "What was it that I did?" For "do" is present tense and "did" is past tense, so seeing how everything else was past I believe that line should be fixed. Other than that wonderful job. Keep it up!

Peace, Joe

I agree with Joe...It should be "did" instead of "do"... Other than that good poem...Keep on writing!! =D 5/5

~Shae

Very well written. Good job!

I like it. It reminds me of what I have been through. I like it alot!

It is not weird. it is beautiful. I know u hav hard time w/ out ur father. I'm sry, but ur poem is deeply beautiful. I'm tellin u. ok I hav 2 go.