*huggles you tightly*
I think you did really well on this to say it was your first poem.
I thought the flow and rhyme scheme worked well, the only place I found it to be shaky was the line 'Am i that much of a fool?'
But, if you keep writing, you will get better =)
Overall, I think you did really well.
xx

Awww..dats so sad! nice write tho, very clear well done!

Awww its soo sad!! i love all your poems your such a good writter i give u 5/5 and thanks for the comment on mine i really appreciate it

brittany