I like this a lot.. the only thing is that the whole poem doesnt rhyme and then the last two lines do.. so it sounds a little out of place.. but besides that i think its really great!

I really like this poem, you can kinda make up your own images of whats going on, it left me wanting more great work 5/5

This was an excellent poem really, i loved it, you're a very talented writer. 5/5

I thought it was interesting because you didn't go into specific detail.. that way the reader can interperet it anyway they seem fit. It was also somewhat symbolic. good write.

Great poem..you left me in suspense. i love it!

I love how you went at writing this poem! nice work!

Narc xxx

Ah! what's next? please finish this ASAP, it's very interesting!

Great poem

Whoa... i loved the imagination you put in your poem! its soo good... amazing.. you got the talent