This, honestly, started off quite good. But the end stanza confused me a bit. Or maybe it's just me. I dunno. Anyways, it was an enjoyable read. Can't wait to read more!! Take care.

-` Poetess // Liz

I agree with your first comment but it is a great start keep writting!

The beginning was awesome, but then end seemed kind of out of place...good work though, i liked it!

Hey remember me.. you commented on my song that i wrote.. well thankz for that and your poem was pretty good its just try and add more detail into it =] mwah good stuff

Hey i think it was really good and i loved the begining 2

Mira quien resucito.

Hows everything?
mandame un mensaje cuando leas esto. oki adios. =]

Hahahha mai para q tu veas ------el no esta muerto el esta vivo joel no esta murto el esta vivo----jajajajajjaja bien y tu bella estra~a......ase dies decadas q ni me mandas un mensaje!!!!!!! mira q paso con el chat room!

how is everything nena all is good or all is bad (how is life treating u)

_joe_