This is a relly good poem! i can kinda feel the emotions u hv.

The poem started off beautifully, but then I started noticing some little things. In the 6th verse you bleed the second part of the verse into the 7th and it really makes the 6th meaningless almost. In the 4th verse, you may want to consider using the past tense for the first line so the reader knows he's imagining something now and dosen't have to go back and re read to make sure. Love the illustration with the butterfly, women will too.